The Demon's Princess

The Otherworldly Series #1

In a lot of ways, The Demon's Princess, felt almost like it was trying to cram every single young adult paranormal trope it could into its pages. Its historical (set in 1896), time travel (Lucinda is from 2010), paranormal (demons and werewolves), romance (Lucinda has three suitors) and cautionary tale (more on that later). Some of the details worked really well; Benton was my favorite characters by far and proved the most consistent of anyone involved, plus his 'watch me turn on the werewolf charm' attitude was certainly appreciated by me!

Then other things didn't quite work as well. For instance Lucinda, who may or may not have paid close attention during history class, seemed to know an awful lot about furniture in the late 19th century. Not only that, but she often made random observations about outfits and fabric. The problem is that Lucinda isn't as well developed as either Benton or Alexander. Almost from the very beginning her entire personality seems to revolve around how one guy or another sees her.

If she's not worrying about acting correctly in the time period she's stuck in, she's worrying about not seeing Alexander or how much she doesn't want to hurt Benton or how wrong she is about Jonathan. The most significant non-male relationship she seems to make is with Benton's housekeeper. Near the latter third of the book, when Asterot mentions how hurt she must have felt when some of the young ladies had shunned her, I kind of laughed because she didn't seem to care one way or the other!

Another problem the book seemed to have was sticking to one tense. Throughout the entire book it switches from first person (through Lucinda) to third person, back again and often Lucinda couldn't decide between present tense and past tense when it's from her perspective. The beginning is very stilted and stiff, with Lucinda lapsing between using contractions and not using them, making her narrative feel very choppy. As the novel picked up speed it became easier to read, but the flow seemed off. Stumbling even, as it shuffled the players along from Point A to B and C with almost non-existent (or badly placed) transitions.

The redeeming factor for me was Benton. I won't lie, he was my absolute favorite part of the novel and it was pure fun to read about him when he wasn't waxing poetical about how gorgeous Lucinda is (something I grew tired of pretty quickly, especially as Lucinda would often follow it by saying 'These men must all be mad to think I'm gorgeous'). He was very sincere and straight forward, he told Lucinda straight up that they should marry and that he didn't mind if her heart was otherwise engaged.

The romance was...odd. I can't say for certain how much time lapsed (less than two weeks?), but in that time Lucinda is kissed by three men, ravished by all three, insulted by two, proposed to twice, propositioned to be a mistress twice and caught in compromising positions with all three (individually), by her father, at least once. To be fair she only admits love for two of the men, but considering everything else that happened in those two weeks (including an almost rape and trip to Hell) i'm surprised she could even contemplate love! She's either the most level-headed girl I've ever read about, or simply too inconsistent to let any of it bother her.

I did enjoy this novel. It was rough, and it felt cramped with so many warring plot points trying to gain dominance, but Colter wrote an intriguing blend of genres that kept me entertained. The sneak peek for book two, who's ending is spoiled in the epilogue of this book, follows Benton's younger brother Dominic's adventures in love. One can only wonder if his pursuits will be as scandalous as his older brother's.

Book Blurb for The Demon's Princess

Trapped in what she at first deems a nightmare, Lucinda Hayworth finds herself living day to day life in Atlanta, in a distant cousin's body – in 1896. Deciding to blend in while she tries to find a way back to her time, she goes through life as Lucinda Caden… a wealthy debutante. At a ball, she meets Alexander, a prince visiting from a small-unknown kingdom in the Atlantic. While Lucinda Caden may be from an influential family, she doesn’t feel worthy of Alex’s attention – especially knowing that she’s really just a modern girl of middle class status trapped in another time.

When Lucinda discovers Alex is more than what he says, she still wants to be with him. Her parents, however, have other ideas. Shoving her in the direction of a long-term family friend, Jonathan, they forbid her from seeing the prince. In an attempt to escape the unwanted attentions of Jonathan Statton, she meets the Earl of Leamont, Benton Richards. While she will always love Alex, Lucinda must decide if she will wait for him forever, or if she will give herself a chance at happiness with someone else.

Book is geared toward audience’s grades 11 and up.

Night Owl Reviews Nov, 2010 3.50